Animation Project: Story Update

Animation Project Story Update:
While the treatment was not finished, I felt it wasn't going anywhere a part of the problem was writing the dialog within the treatment, seeing as this was not working for me I decided to re-write it but into a script form, in more detail, writing as a script is helping me with the dialog and format the story better, I am using what I have of  treatment as a base for the script.

I only have the first section of the script but I am planning to complete it this week and storyboard it in the holidays.


Treatment (Template):

Ezaru swops in and flops down in the doorway sobbing. Inside Ezaru’s mother, Martha, hears a sound coming from outside and opens the door. She sees her daughter in clear distress and nuzzles into her to comfort her. Ezaru’s tears flow freely as she tells her mother of her fight with Ace, her best friend. She Borrowed his father’s knife, after using it she had forgotten where she had put it, thinking that she must have put it back where Ace keeps it.

When Ace returns to their nest,

when she came back ace was franticly searching for his Book, found out she took it and blew up. She then fled back home.

Martha comforts her, ensuring that one fight will not break a good friendship,

Martha mutters (Despite your choice of a human friend) as she ushers her daughter inside and out of the cold. Martha leads Ezaru into the living room sitting her down on a low resting couch.

Martha sits down next to her, folding a wing over her daughter. Martha consoles her daughter saying she had her own share of fights with Nova when they were traveling.

Ezaru chuckles, mentioning when they had squabbled over the last vanilla pudding, she always loves hearing about her mothers own adventures.

Martha, askes if she told of how she and Nova met,

Ezaru’s ears perk as she replies that she hadn’t now begging her to tell the story.

Martha looks at Ezaru and smirks, she will on one condition, that she would, the next day, fix things with Ace. Ezaru sighs before agreeing

FB1: MARTHA VO

Martha begins narrating her tale.
Martha is searching for four leaf clovers on a grassy hill, they had recently moved into their new home and she was looking for four leaf clovers to press and decorate her room with.

A sound from behind alerts her to an approaching presence, she turns to find another dragon. Curious, Martha askes who the mysterious dragon is. The dragon introduces himself as Nova, trotting over to the tree centered on the peak of the hill. He jumps up against the trunk shoving his head into the hollow, much to Martha’s confusion and continues the conversation. Nova brings up he hadn’t seen her around here, and asked who she was

Martha introduces herself stating that she is new here. is looking for clovers, however hadn’t had much luck in terms of finding them

Nova pulls out a golden horn ring out of the trunk with a “ah-hah” Before either can speak a distant shout is heard.
Nova curses and begins to run away, throwing a short goodbye and hopes to meet again

(Something Here to break up the scene)

FB2:

Martha continues the story, she had returned the next day to continue her search. Nova sneaks up behind her as she unknowingly brushes through the clover patch, Nova grins and Pounces upon her. Martha screeches pushing a laughing Nova off her. She askes why he is back at the hill, Nova responds that he forgot something in the hollow, Martha give him a doubtful look, “its true, I forgot the chain-link, otherwise I wouldn’t get out again for ages:”

He mentions his family often kept him cooped up in the city and monitored who he spent time with, making sure he didn’t associate with young dragon that would be ‘a bad influence’.

so spending time with a new friend on his own terms was refreshing.

And a rare opportunity

Martha” is nice to know I have a friend, so soon after moving here,”

Voice over montage:

Consisting of the two dragon putting notes into the hollow and taking the one left out to read

(Something Here to break up the scene)

FB 3

Martha and Nova meet up, in person this time, Martha pulls out a small parcel
“Its been a while since we have met at the same time so –“

Martha is interrupted by a far off explosion followed by distant screams
The two look at each other, while there was the occasional accident among dragons,

They didn’t often cause mass panic among the residents of their world.

They give each other a look, “Lets go” Nova said taking off with Martha not too far behind.

As they approach the scene becomes more worrisome, dragons fleeing and buildings in ruin

human

They struggle

Just escape, Dragons panicking (getting captured killed and fleeing)

Nova says they will be safer in the city, Martha stop him saying she needs to get her family, they are still at the house.

Nova nods and they go to the house.
They get there through the panic to find Martha’s home in shambles, no dragon in site,
Martha rushes inside desperate to find her family, calling out for her mother and father.
Her disturbance triggered a hidden trap, Marthe gets snagged in a Net and setting of a small signal emitter

The Two Startle as they hear a harsh, “Nova”, Novas father had found them
Turns out his father went looking for him when the attack started, he had a gut feeling Nova would have tried to find his friend.

Dragon hunters are at the door, marching in on the three dragons, NovaDad, Shouts they need to go now,
They bust outside to find more hunters,

NovaDad - They can’t get back to the city,, there only hope is to flee to another dimension
Martha argues as NovaDad fights, He shuts her down and ushers the kids to follow him Freeing a path to take of

They take off, NovaDad breaches a path to travel dimensions But is cut off by a net
He sees that they wont escape with the hunters on the tail
He shouts at Nova and Matha that they must jump to a dimension on their own.
The kids are in tears nova askes what about him
Nova dad looks at his son with love, and says he will follow after

Knowing that he wont make it
The kids flee while Nova dad Fights hunters

They manage to breach into another dimension Nova looks back at his father before the breach closes.
They crash down on a quiet world, the silence deafening 

“that’s why you went on an adventure isn’t it, because you had nowhere to go,”
Martha sighs “we had little choice in the matter, the hunters had ravaged our home, we no longer had our haven to call home, that why it terrifies me that you confront the hunters with that human of yours, after seeing what they can do first hand, it terrifies me, Ezaru looks away a little shamed,
“but”

Ezaru’s ears prick up
“I am also very proud, not many are brave enough to try and change things to confront the hunters and protect your own kind is braver then I could ever be,” Martha nuzzles her daughter showing her affection, Ezaru leans into the embrace
“I couldn’t have done it without Ace, he has always had my back when we pick fights with the hunters,” Ezaru takes a deep breath, “ I don’t want to loose him” Ezaru gets up off the couch and takes a few steps to the door before turning her head to look at her mother “Im gonna go find Ace,”
Martha smiles and gives an improving nod, Ezaru smiled and runs through the door before skidding to a halt, she rushes back over to her mother to give her a hug, “I love you mum,”
“I love you too sweetheart”
Ezaru pulls back and bounds outside taking off with a confident flap of her wings.
Martha stands in the doorway, watching her go “that’s my girl”

Script (First section):

FADE IN:

EXT: Stormy Night:

Ezaru Vermelho is flying through the stormy weather to her childhood home, she swoops in and flops down in the doorway crying.

INT: Dragons-Ledge:

Martha hears a sound coming from outside and opens the door, she sees her daughter in clear distress

EXT: Stormy Night:

Martha Vermelho: Fire Dragon Mother:
Ezaru? What’s wrong sweetie

She nuzzles her head against her daughter to comfort her, at this affection Ezaru break down

Ezaru Vermelho: Young fire Dragon:
I screwed up, I messed everything up and now Ace hates me

Martha VermelhoThe human?
Come on, let’s get you warmed up first and dry those tears, you can tell me what happened inside.

Martha sighs and gives a knowing smile, helping her daughter up and inside the house out of the cold weather and into the warm house

INT: Dragons-Ledge:

Ezaru is laying on a couch with a warm drink in hand, no longer crying, Martha lays down next to her and folds a wing over her daughter providing her with a safe feeling, Ezaru leans into the touch,

Martha VermelhoNow how about you tell me what happened

Ezaru Vermelho

I borrowed the knife Ace always has with him, to cut some fruit for lunch, before Ace got back, when I was done I put it back or…
… I thought I did, I forgot where I put it, Later Ace was looking for it and…  …when he found out I had borrowed it he got mad, I tried.. I tried to help him find it but he just told me to go away.

I don’t know… he seemed agitated I don’t know why

    

Martha Vermelho

Oh dear sweetie, you should ask before borrowing things, it sounds like it was important to him, did you have a proper look around where you were using it, dd you try retracing your steps?

Ezaru Vermelho

I did  I did. I always make sure to do that when I’ve lost something, I looked everywhere and I couldn’t find it, I don’t know where I could have left it, It can’t have been someone else because only Ace and I go to our hideout.

Martha chuckles causing her daughter to give her a questioning glare.

Martha Vermelho

Sorry sweetie, you defiantly take after your father, he as you know often forgets where he put things and turns to me to find it, most often it being right under his nose, he has always been like that ever since we met.

Ezaru sighs and looks the other way, flicking one of her ears,

Martha Vermelho: Fire Dragon Mother:

Sometimes to find something you need to take a break and when you come back so can the memories of what you did, Is what Nova does, when we first met he was franticly searching around the lakeside looking for his book up and down,

Ezaru

Did he find it?

Martha Vermelho

Yes all the time it turned out to be stashed in the hollow of a nearby tree, he hid it there to keep it away from his younger cousins whom were at a family picnic with him a few day earlier-

Ezaru froze for a second, the cogs in her brain turning before she slammed her hands down and sat up straight startling Martha who gave her daughter a surprised and confused look.

Ezaru Vermelho

THE HOLLOW, THE BLODDY HOLLOW THAT’S WHERE I LEFT IT
..Ugghhhhh I’m such an idiot

Ezaru sank back down after her outburst, the storm outside continued to rage on getting worse the wind howling daring anyone to fly into its rage. Ezaru stood up.

Ezaru Vermelho

I should go get it before the weather gets any worse

Martha Vermelho

Not tonight’s, its way to cold and the knife isn’t going anywhere I’m sure both you and Ace need some time to think, even the closest of people need time to be alone.

Ezaru flopped down in defeat as much as she wanted to fix this as soon as she could, her mother was right, they storm was getting worse and at this point not a good idea to fly into.

Ezaru Vermelho

Fine…  …its nice to hang out with you again,

You said you two met when he was looking for his book, but how did you two become friends, can you tell me how you two met

Martha Vermelho

I don’t see why not

Ezaru Vermelho

Yes….